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    ShadowFox516
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    Writing styles

    Post  ShadowFox516 on Mon Aug 29, 2011 3:00 pm

    So I noticed that Jonathan used a Third-Person past tense style, and I was wondering if that was required of all the characters. I'm pretty sure we're free to write our chapters however we'd like, but I wanted to make sure.

    That being said, I'm probably going to do Fox's chapters in First-Person present tense. Either that, or I'll try to mimic Daren Shan's way of writing in the Demonata series, if any of you have ever heard of it. Here's a few paragraphs of the first book to give you an idea.


    The door feels red hot, as though a fire is burning behind it. I press an ear to the wood—if I hear the crackle of flames, I’ll race straight to the phone and dial 999. But there’s no crackle. No smoke. Just deep, heavy breathing… and a curious dripping sound.

    My hand’s on the door knob. My fingers won’t move. I keep my ear pressed to the wood, waiting… praying. A tear trickles from my left eye. It dries on my cheek from the heat. Inside the room, somebody giggles—low, throaty, sadistic. Not Mum, Dad or Gret. There’s a ripping sound, followed by snaps and crunches.

    My hand turns. The door opens.

    Hell is revealed.

    Blood everywhere. Nightmarish splashes and gory pools. Wild streaks across the floor and walls. Except the walls aren’t walls. I’m surrounded on all four sides by webs. Millions of strands, thicker than my arm, some connecting in orderly designs, others running chaotically apart. Many of the strands are stained with blood. Behind the layer of webs, more layers—banks of them stretching back as far as I can see. Infinite.

    My eyes snap from the walls. I make quick, mental thumbnails of other details. Numb. Functioning like a machine. The dripping sound—a body hanging upside down from the webby ceiling in the centre of the room. No head. Blood drops to the floor from the gaping red O of the neck. Even without the head, I recognise him.

    “DAD!” I scream, and the cry almost rips my vocal chords apart.

    To my left, an obscene creature spins round and snarls. It has the body of a very large dog, the head of a crocodile. Beneath it, motionless—Mum. Or what’s left of her. A dreadful howl to my right. Gret! Sitting on the floor, staring at me, weaving sideways, her face white, except where it’s smeared with blood. I start to call to her. She half-turns and I realise that she’s been split in two. Something’s behind her, in the cavity at the back, moving her like a hand-puppet.

    The ‘something’ pushes Gret away. It’s a child, but no child of this world. It has the body of a three-year-old, with a head much larger than any normal person’s. Pale green skin. No eyes—a small ball of fire flickers in each of its empty sockets. No hair—yet its head is alive with movement. As the hell-child advances, I see that the objects are cockroaches. Living. Feeding on its rotten flesh. The crocodile-dog moves away from Mum and also closes in on me, exchanging glances with the monstrous child, who’s narrowing the gap.

    I can’t move. Fear has seized me completely. I look from Mum to Dad to Gret. All red. All dead. Impossible! This isn’t happening! A bad dream—it must be! But even in my very worst nightmare, I never imagined anything like this. I know that it’s real, simply because it’s too awful not to be.

    The creatures are almost upon me. The croc-dog growls hungrily. The hell-child grins ghoulishly and raises its hands—there are mouths in both its palms, small, full of sharp teeth. No tongues.

    “Oh dear,” someone says, and the creatures stop within spitting distance. “What have we here?” A man slides out from behind a clump of webby strands. Thin. Pale red skin, misshapen, lumpy, as though made out of coloured dough. His hands are mangled, bones sticking out of the skin, one finger melting into another. Bald. Strange eyes—no white, just a dark red iris and an even darker pupil. There’s a gaping, jagged hole in the left side of his chest. I can look clean through it. Inside the hole—snakes. Dozens of tiny, hissing, coiled serpents, with long curved fangs. The hell-child shrieks and reaches towards me. The teeth in its small mouths are eagerly snapping open and shut.

    “Stop, Artery,” the man—the monster—says commandingly, and steps towards me. No… he doesn’t step… he glides. He has no feet. The lumpy flesh of his lower legs ends in sharp strips which don’t touch the floor. He’s hovering in the air. The croc-dog barks savagely, its reptilian eyes alive with hunger and hate. “Hold, Vein,” the monster orders. He advances to within touching distance of me. Stops and studies me with his unnatural red eyes. He has a small mouth. White lips. He looks sad—the saddest creature I’ve ever seen.

    “You are Grubitsch,” he says morosely. “The last of the Gradys. You should not be here. Your parents wished to spare you this heartache. Why did you come?” I can’t answer. My body isn’t my own, except my eyes, which don’t stop roaming and analysing, even though I want them to—easier to shut off completely and black everything out. The hell-child makes a guttural sound and reaches for me again. “Disobey me at your peril, Artery,” the monster says softly. The barbaric baby drops its hands and shuffles backwards, the fire in its eyes dimming. The croc-dog retreats too. Both keep their sights on me. “Such sadness,” the monster sighs, and there’s genuine pity in his tone. “Parents—dead. Sister—dead. All alone in the world. Face to face with demons. No idea who we are or why we’re here.” He pauses and doubt crosses his expression. “You don’t know, do you, Grubitsch? Nobody ever explained, or told you the story of lonely Lord Loss?”

    I still can’t answer, but he reads the ignorance in my eyes and smiles thinly, painully. “I thought not,” he says. “They sought to protect you from the cruelties of the world. Good, loving parents. You’ll miss them, Grubitsch—but not for long.” The creatures to my left and right make sick, chuckling sounds. “Your sorrow shall be short-lived. Within minutes I’ll set my familiars upon you and all will soon finish. There will be pain great pain—but then the total peace of the beyond. Death will come as a blessing, Grubitsch. You will welcome it in the end—as your parents and sister did.”

    The monster drifts around me. I realise he has no nose, just two large holes above his upper lip. He sniffs as he passes, and I somehow understand that he’s smelling my fear. “Poor Grubitsch,” he murmurs, stopping in front of me again. This close, I can see that his red skin is broken by tiny cracks, seeping with drops of blood. I also notice several appendages beneath his arms—three on either side, folded around his stomach. They look like thin, extra arms, though they might just be oddly moulded layers of flesh.

    “Wh-wh… what… are… you?” I moan, forcing the words out between my chattering teeth. “The beginning and end of your greatest sorrows,” the monster replies. He says it plainly—not a boast. “Mu-Mum?” I gasp. “Dad? Gr-Gr… Gr…”

    “Gone,” he whispers, shaking his head, blood oozing from the cracks in his neck. “Remember them, Grubitsch. Recall the golden memories. Cherish them in these, your final moments. Cry for them, Grubitsch. Give me your tears.” He smiles eagerly and his right hand reaches for my face. He brushes his mashed-together fingers across my left cheek, just beneath my eye, as though trying to charm tears from me. The touch of his skin—moist, rough, sticky—repels me. Without thinking, I turn my back on the hell of my parents’ bedroom and run. Behind me, the monster chuckles darkly, clears his throat and says, “Vein. Artery. He is yours.”

    With vile, vicious howls of delight, the creatures give chase.
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    Re: Writing styles

    Post  LukeSterling on Mon Aug 29, 2011 3:21 pm

    I know some people are quite picky about how the roleplay proceeds in third or first person, I don't mind either way though I prefer third person for myself I have recently rped a lot of first-person viewpoints. I like first person because it gets right up in the character's head. And I think your character would be wickedly satisfying to see in the mind of, mine however will be third-person limited. Written more from the character's viewpoint but still in the third person, because I am a description kind of person, descriptions, descriptions everywhere. lol. Plus I feel I am more skilled at third person because I've honed that a lot more. But I am cool with whatever perspective you choose.

    P.s. I like the perspective example you posted.
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    Re: Writing styles

    Post  ShadowFox516 on Mon Aug 29, 2011 3:32 pm

    P.s. I like the perspective example you posted.
    As you damn well should! That's the most interesting part of the entire first book and it happens to also be the entire second chapter. Though the chapter where he's in an asylum for PTSD (he just walked in on demons eating his family, he definitely went crazy) details the style better. But I liked this passage better.

    But yea, the reason I want to use this style is because it allows for fragments and a lot of random "This is the scene, but I couldn't think of a good way to say it so I just said it." I tend to brainstorm in many fragments. I had to work to get my character's background to make sense. However, I get the feeling most of my posts will be more like my description. Short and to the point.

    Ex. In the paragraphs starting with "Blood everywhere." Shan wastes no with flavorful words to describe the scene, he just says what's there.
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    Re: Writing styles

    Post  Tetheas on Mon Aug 29, 2011 3:51 pm

    Yeah man, as long as it's not written in a way so that it's confusing to other people what's going on/what your character is doing, then that's more than fine. It's best for everyone to write in the style that suits them best, not only for their sake, but for the sake of the RP. Like Chris said, third person is just the most preferred style for RPing.

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